Comments for Gracieb07's Weblog http://gracieb07.wordpress.com Just another WordPress.com weblog Thu, 17 Apr 2008 14:24:24 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Travel Essay by brenlnic http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/04/15/travel-essay/#comment-53 brenlnic Thu, 17 Apr 2008 14:24:24 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/?p=17#comment-53 Nice find. It's also interesting that she focuses on one ride, rather than the overly done entire theme park. The ride sounds fun to me! Nice find. It’s also interesting that she focuses on one ride, rather than the overly done entire theme park. The ride sounds fun to me!

]]> Comment on Assignment #8: Revision of Book Review by chic7854 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/04/01/assignment-8-revision-of-book-review/#comment-51 chic7854 Thu, 03 Apr 2008 17:31:23 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/?p=14#comment-51 Overall I found your argument to be pretty persuasive. I liked how you slowly developed the plot instead of just saying Anna was mad about something so she yelled at her parents, that would not have been very interesting to read. It was very effective when you brought the writer's life into the review because now as a reader I can see those parts and know that they are not made up, that they came from someone who was had the same suffering. I enjoyed the quote that you inserted because, as someone who has never heard of the book, I could see why it was so entrancing because I felt the same way. The quote also made me wonder what I would do or think if I was in her situation. Everyone deals with identity in their lives but this makes her struggle that much more crucial to her well-being. I think I would like to read this book after reading review and you proved that it was a good book to read without shoving it down the readers throat. Overall I found your argument to be pretty persuasive. I liked how you slowly developed the plot instead of just saying Anna was mad about something so she yelled at her parents, that would not have been very interesting to read. It was very effective when you brought the writer’s life into the review because now as a reader I can see those parts and know that they are not made up, that they came from someone who was had the same suffering. I enjoyed the quote that you inserted because, as someone who has never heard of the book, I could see why it was so entrancing because I felt the same way. The quote also made me wonder what I would do or think if I was in her situation. Everyone deals with identity in their lives but this makes her struggle that much more crucial to her well-being. I think I would like to read this book after reading review and you proved that it was a good book to read without shoving it down the readers throat.

]]> Comment on Assignment #7: Get your verb on by ksmebaby55 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/24/assignment-7-get-your-verb-on/#comment-46 ksmebaby55 Wed, 26 Mar 2008 23:49:33 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/?p=12#comment-46 I thought you did a great job. I like the argument because i agree when you were talking about college students.. I thought you did a great job. I like the argument because i agree when you were talking about college students..

]]> Comment on Assignment #7: Get your verb on by carawhalen http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/24/assignment-7-get-your-verb-on/#comment-45 carawhalen Wed, 26 Mar 2008 20:50:15 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/?p=12#comment-45 I thought that you made a couple great points in your paragraph regarding your two main points; money and excessive freedom. However, i found it to be a bit confusing when you transitioned to "causes confusion and indecisiveness in a person’s life." I think that, even though this was only an exercise, it could be expanded a bit more to show exactly what you mean by this. Also it seems that you are arguing that most college students experience this, but is this really true? I thought that your topic was great, and that you can target a lot of attention. I thought that you made a couple great points in your paragraph regarding your two main points; money and excessive freedom. However, i found it to be a bit confusing when you transitioned to “causes confusion and indecisiveness in a person’s life.” I think that, even though this was only an exercise, it could be expanded a bit more to show exactly what you mean by this. Also it seems that you are arguing that most college students experience this, but is this really true? I thought that your topic was great, and that you can target a lot of attention.

]]> Comment on Assignment #7: Get your verb on by cutticap http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/24/assignment-7-get-your-verb-on/#comment-44 cutticap Tue, 25 Mar 2008 20:28:08 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/?p=12#comment-44 I agree with both of them as well. Space out everything, it was very hard to read. It strengthened your argument immensely to have your statistics be factual. However you should mention where they came from to make them credible. Do you have any personal experience with dropping out, friends, relatives, etc? Also, maybe later on in the paper you could talk about the effects dropping out has on the people around that person (parents, friends, bosses, etc.). I agree with both of them as well. Space out everything, it was very hard to read.

It strengthened your argument immensely to have your statistics be factual. However you should mention where they came from to make them credible. Do you have any personal experience with dropping out, friends, relatives, etc? Also, maybe later on in the paper you could talk about the effects dropping out has on the people around that person (parents, friends, bosses, etc.).

]]> Comment on Assignment #7: Get your verb on by crandella802 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/24/assignment-7-get-your-verb-on/#comment-43 crandella802 Tue, 25 Mar 2008 18:48:47 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/?p=12#comment-43 I agree with Morgan, try to space out your responses. It will make it much easier to read. I liked how you backed up you topic with statistics, however try to mention where they cam from. This will make your evidence more believable and logical for the reader. Also I think you should share your experiences with someone dropping out of school. Was it one of the examples that you gave in the above paragraph? I agree with Morgan, try to space out your responses. It will make it much easier to read.

I liked how you backed up you topic with statistics, however try to mention where they cam from. This will make your evidence more believable and logical for the reader.
Also I think you should share your experiences with someone dropping out of school. Was it one of the examples that you gave in the above paragraph?

]]> Comment on Assignment #7: Get your verb on by morganbeth44 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/24/assignment-7-get-your-verb-on/#comment-42 morganbeth44 Tue, 25 Mar 2008 03:23:02 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/?p=12#comment-42 Just a suggestion firstly: if possible try to separate your thoughts with spaces or bold font to make it more readable. I agree with the statements you make in your paragraph concerning college students and the reason they drop out, but I wonder if your statistics and claims have actual statistical and researched based evidence? I was also a little confused as to what your argument is going to be for your essay; it seems from the start that you currently have you could take several different stances, I'm interested to see which way you choose to go with your essay:-) Morgan Just a suggestion firstly: if possible try to separate your thoughts with spaces or bold font to make it more readable.

I agree with the statements you make in your paragraph concerning college students and the reason they drop out, but I wonder if your statistics and claims have actual statistical and researched based evidence? I was also a little confused as to what your argument is going to be for your essay; it seems from the start that you currently have you could take several different stances, I’m interested to see which way you choose to go with your essay:-)
Morgan

]]> Comment on Book Review by Michelle http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/18/book-review/#comment-40 Michelle Sun, 23 Mar 2008 18:57:38 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/18/book-review/#comment-40 The story sounds very interesting.You gave a good review of the book. You did not give away too much information on the plotof the story The story sounds very interesting.You gave a good review of the book. You did not give away too much information on the plotof the story

]]> Comment on Book Review by Kait http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/18/book-review/#comment-39 Kait Thu, 20 Mar 2008 14:50:51 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/18/book-review/#comment-39 I read this book too and I agree that it was really good. At the time I read it I was writing a paper on whether or not cloning is ethical, so the book really made me think. I read this book too and I agree that it was really good. At the time I read it I was writing a paper on whether or not cloning is ethical, so the book really made me think.

]]> Comment on Book Review by todda768 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/18/book-review/#comment-38 todda768 Thu, 20 Mar 2008 01:37:27 +0000 http://gracieb07.wordpress.com/2008/03/18/book-review/#comment-38 Hey-- I thought that you did a really great job on your book review. This sounds like a really interesting story and I definitely would like to read it. I felt like you gave just the right amount of information. I didn't feel uninformed, but I didn't feel like you ruined any possible endings to the story either. Great job! Hey–
I thought that you did a really great job on your book review. This sounds like a really interesting story and I definitely would like to read it. I felt like you gave just the right amount of information. I didn’t feel uninformed, but I didn’t feel like you ruined any possible endings to the story either. Great job!

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